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Wat wud u do if I closed my i's/If I never saw the mornin lite/Wud u cry or wud u grin/Wud u b ther wen they


Laid me n the ground/Wud u b standin rite by me/Wud u b ther 2 say goodby/Wud 1000 teardrops fall/2 the ground, like rain from ur i's/Wat wud u do if I closd my i's/If I never saw the mornin lite/Wat if u never sed goodby/Wat if u never thot hello/Wat if I sed goodby 2nite/%26amp; u’d never know/Wat if I left this world/Wat if u never saw me agin/Wud u b ther singin a/Sad %26amp; forlorn hymn/Wat wud u do if I closd my i's


If I never saw the mornin lite/Its a brand new dawn/Its a bright new day/Open up ur stony hart %26amp; say/“I’m sry/That I missd u growin up/I’m sry/I never sed hello or goodby/I’m sry/I never was ther/2 c u go away/4ever %26amp; ever %26amp; ever”/I left this world


%26amp; u dint kno/I sed goodby/But u never sed/Hello/Wat did u do wen I closed my i's/Wat did u say wen u saw the mornin lite/Did u cry/Did u cry/Did u cry1000 tears/Or just 1/i sed goodby/i sed goodby/i sed goodby/only 2 u...

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hmmm...i like it
Reply:its alright . :)
Reply:First of all please spell right, honey.





You can tell there is emotion an passion in it, but it's missing that PUNCH.





It has nothing special, but i'm not saying its horrible. Ask family for more advise